One fine day,
I'll simply vanish,
leaving behind no trace,
other than,
just a memory,
then slowly that memory shall also fade away...
like the wisps of hanging smoke....
Still,
somewhere,
high up in the sky,
far far away from all the world's cares,
free,
unknown,
Un-beckoned....
I shall fly
Forgotten,
by the rest,
yet, still aware of myself,
of my dreams,
of my desires,
of my choices...
known only to myself,
like a free bird
I shall fly ,
in the open sky,
in pursuit of my peace
spreading wide,
the wings of anarchy that burns within
I'll simply vanish,
leaving behind no trace,
other than,
just a memory,
then slowly that memory shall also fade away...
like the wisps of hanging smoke....
Still,
somewhere,
high up in the sky,
far far away from all the world's cares,
free,
unknown,
Un-beckoned....
I shall fly
Forgotten,
by the rest,
yet, still aware of myself,
of my dreams,
of my desires,
of my choices...
known only to myself,
like a free bird
I shall fly ,
in the open sky,
in pursuit of my peace
spreading wide,
the wings of anarchy that burns within
23 comments:
i love it meeta! i really do.
nice expression ..good one meeta
@viti glad u like it :)
@rahul thanku :)
Simply awesome... compliments the great weather :)
beautiful meeta :)
good one!! keep writing!!
This piece is poetry in it's essence. So beautifully are the verses crafted that visualization and personalization are effortless, yet the last verse undoes the picture of outer and inner equanimity the poem has painstakingly built. And I guess, therein lies the handsomeness of thoughts and magnificence of art!
Kudos Meeta! I loved your work.
Is the typo-para spacing done deliberately? If yes, then it already signifies the free spirit in you :).
I love the idea of flying up high above unbeknown!
@Vivek i loved the beginning of the poem, but i don't like how it ended, but sum how i could not alter the ending as it came with the same thought process...maybe i'll edit it later.
@Surubhi thanku :)
@Freedom thanku for d read & comment.
@Headway thanku for your read & insightful comment..& trust me even as the writer..I find the last unbecoming of the poem....but try as I may I can't keep it away from the poem..it then feels incomplete.
@Nikita the spacing b/w the paragraphs & the construction of lines was deliberate.....that is how i wrote the poem when it started coming to me.
Thank you for the read 7 comment :)
The real freedom! Nothing to tie u down to the Earth, not even a memory! Nice feeling!
@Aditya thanku :)
Very good, fly on to peace.
enjoy pjc
http://www.peterjcrowley.com
It appears Google won't let me post on open ID?
hmmmm
to fly or not to fly
maybe i will, maybe i won't
no matter what the state of the wings
the question will remain, still
@Peter thanku for reading thru..I'll surely chk out ur blog :)
@Adee the question is why would u not wanna fly??
one should not be so pessimistic.Live and find meaning who knows what happens after we are dead.
@chandrakant I'm soi if u felt that the poem was pessimistic...bt infact this poem was about hope.
Hope of a human being to be one day able to do whatever his or her soul wishes to do, without being held up by the expectations or chains that bind us in the present day high output to meet high expectation lifestyle....Freedom to be what we wish to be.
@meeta i humbly accept that i got the author's imagination wrong but...I think i turned the essence of poem upside down.Thanks correcting me.NICE THOUGHTS KEEP WRITING...
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